和我一起学习英文英文邮件吧(转帖)

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山里人家 发表于 2012-9-5 12:07

                               
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加不了，人家拒绝了

找Q168啊，他通过就行了。

Q168

Dear Mr. Jeff,
Thank you for your email on 4 Sep. We need one month to finish our old stocks. Next month we will use the new model to assemble, then send them to you.
Please understand.

Best Regards

Huang

二胡

很好啊，以后不会的我来抄你的了！

山里人家

Q168 发表于 2012-9-5 15:16

                               
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Dear Mr. Jeff,
Thank you for your email on 4 Sep. We need one month to finish our old stocks. Next  ...

Please understand.

这中文是什么意思

山里人家

山里人家 发表于 2012-9-6 07:01

                               
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Please understand.

这中文是什么意思

哦，谢谢，只知道： excuse me，是表示谅解，学习了

Jim

Q168 发表于 2012-9-5 15:16

                               
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Dear Mr. Jeff,
Thank you for your email on 4 Sep. We need one month to finish our old stocks. Next  ...

Dear Mr. Jeff,
Thank you for your email on 4 Sep. We need one month to finish our old stocks. Next month we will use the new model to assemble, then send them to you.
Please understand.

Best Regards

Huang
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The above letter contains several mistakes. Now please refer to what I may write the same message.

Dear Jeff,

Thank you for your email dated 4 September.

Regarding the new model,unfortunately we still have some inventory for the old model. However we will start using the new model to assemble the machine once the inventory depletes. Please be noted that it will take approximately one month for us to absorb the stocks.

Should you have any question, we would be glad to assist you.

Yours sincerely,

XX Huang

Jim

Dear Mr. Smith,

Thank you for your inquiry regarding the humidifiers UL9982001. The information you want has been sent to you today. Please kindly check.
If you have further questions about this product, please contact Miss Lee at our Service Department. Her direct number is 666-1234.
Thanks again for your attention and support.

Sincerely yours,
HM Corporation
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以上的文字总的说太空洞了，没有内容，不能给读者留下比较深刻的印象，初学者往往容易犯这样的错误。看看如下的改动,供参考：

Dear Mr. Smith,

Thank you for your interest in our humidifier UL9982001. As requested, we have sent you our newest catalogs, and a user instruction for this model of humidifier.

In addition, please kindly refer to our website www.xxx.com. You may find most of the information that intrigues you, including many other models of humidifiers. Our company has been in business since 1990, and is specialized in producing humidifiers. We have more than two years outstanding export history to North America, Europe and Asian Pacific countries. XXXXXXXXXX （more may be added if you want)

Should you have any further inquiries, please feel free to contact Miss Lee, our Service Manager. Her direct phone is 666-1234, and she would be glad to assist you.

Sincerely yours,

HM Corporation

Jim

Dear Mr. Smith,

Thank you for your inquiry regarding the humidifiers UL9982001. The information you want has been sent to you today. Please kindly check.
If you have further questions about this product, please contact Miss Lee at our Service Department. Her direct number is 666-1234.
Thanks again for your attention and support.

Sincerely yours,
HM Corporation
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以上的文字总的说太空洞了，没有内容，不能给读者留下比较深刻的印象，初学者往往容易犯这样的错误。看看如下的改动,供参考：

Dear Mr. Smith,

Thank you for your interest in our humidifier UL9982001. As requested, we have sent you our newest catalogs, and a user instruction for this model of humidifier.

In addition, please kindly refer to our website www.xxx.com. You may find most of the information that intrigues you, including many other models of humidifiers. Our company has been in business since 1990, and is specialized in producing humidifiers. We have more than two years outstanding export history to North America, Europe and Asian Pacific countries. XXXXXXXXXX （more may be added if you want)

Should you have any further inquiries, please feel free to contact Miss Lee, our Service Manager. Her direct phone is 666-1234, and she would be glad to assist you.

Sincerely yours,

HM Corporation

ccsspp454

Jim 发表于 2012-9-1 13:12

                               
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The opening and closing are pretty good; however, it appears the body is empty. Why do I say so? You ...

thanks