和我一起学习英文英文邮件吧(转帖)

Jim

ccsspp454 发表于 2012-9-14 18:59

                               
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Dear Jimmy
      I  want to Invite you and your wife to attend our wedding ceremony  on september  ...

Dear Jimmy
      I  want to Invite you and your wife to attend our wedding ceremony  on september  15 2012.
The party will start at 9:30 A.M.  I hope you can  get there  before 9:00 A.M and help me to entertain our colleagues.
      yours
     ccsspp454
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The key flaw is that you have used too many "Is". See how I revise this:

Dear Jimmy,

You and your wife are cordially invited to attend our wedding ceremony on 15 September 2012. The part will start at 9:30am in Hilton Hotel. The address is: XXXXXXX. Please be arrived at 9:00am, and help us receive the other attendees.

Should you have any question regarding this ceremony, please feel free to call us.

Yours,

XXX

Jim

Q168 发表于 2012-9-13 18:57

                               
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Dear Jeff,
I'm sorry that our company GM and I will be absent in office next Monday and Tuesday. We  ...

这一篇的问题是主次不分。写英文，你要先陈述事实，然后再告诉读者你不能履约的原因。看看我给你改的：
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Dear Jeff,

Thank you for your letter/email of XXXX.

Mr. YYY, our GM, and I will attend a trade show next Monday and Tuesday, September 17-18 2012, however, we may schedule our meeting on Wednesday, or any other day at your convenience next week.

In the meantime, our product engineer, Mr. Liu, informed us he had received the product EC003-95-07 specifications seven year before. For more information, please contact Mr. Liu directly. His phone# is: 9999999, and email account is: mmmm@yyyyy

For further business, please be noted we have decided to purchase a new motor vibration tester.

Should you have any question, please feel free to contact us, and we would be glad to assist you.

Yours,

XXXXX

ccsspp454

Jim 发表于 2012-9-16 22:36

                               
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Dear Jimmy
      I  want to Invite you and your wife to attend our wedding ceremony  on september  ...

thank you very much.

Q168

Huang,

Please don't forget send me the follow mail today.

Also please send me the customer complain summary from Brazil this year, this summary should include:  failure mode, complain date, root cause analysis and corrective actions.
Please send it to me before this Thursday.

Thanks

Best Regards
Jeff

Q168

Dear Jeff,
Please kindly check two accessories of this mail.
If you have any questions, please contact me.

Thanks

Best Regards
Huang

ccsspp454

Q168 发表于 2012-9-18 16:18

                               
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Huang,

Please don't forget send me the follow mail today.

Huang,

Could you send me the follow mail today?

Also please send me the customer complain summary from Brazil this year.This summary should include:  failure mode, complain date, root cause analysis and corrective actions.
Could you send it to me before this Thursday.

Thanks

Best Regards
Jeff

我觉得用Could you...?比较委婉，让人容易接受。

ccsspp454

Q168 发表于 2012-9-18 16:19

                               
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Dear Jeff,
Please kindly check two accessories of this mail.
If you have any questions, please cont ...

“accessories” may be"attachment"?
"accessories"是配件
“attachment”是附件。

Jim

ccsspp454 发表于 2012-9-19 12:39

                               
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Huang,

Could you send me the follow mail today?

在英语中，不是越委婉越好，你要看你跟读信人的关系，关系越近，越不用委婉

Q168

ccsspp454 发表于 2012-9-19 12:41

                               
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“accessories” may be"attachment"?
"accessories"是配件
“attachment”是附件。

Please kindly check two attachments of this mail.
？？？
邮件附件 accessory  和attachment都可以用吧

ccsspp454

Q168 发表于 2012-9-19 13:04

                               
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Please kindly check two attachments of this mail.
？？？
邮件附件 accessory  和attachment都可以用 ...

yes,
I understand  accessory   only is 配件。